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The Thinginthecorner by ~BunnyHeadWounds:iconBunnyHeadWounds:



The Thinginthecorner arrived quite unexpectedly
One evening,
And made itself at home.
It was an odd, reddish thing,
With fangs, and claws,
But it kept them well hidden.
It slept on an old jumper and never snored.
Never made a sound, really.
It was just… There.

One day, the Thinginthecorner
Began to speak.
But it spoke in a language I didn’t understand,
Although now, it’s hard to forget.
Slowly, we learned to communicate,
And realized that sometimes words lie to us.
We spoke nearly every night,
In our own way.

The Thinginthecorner and I became
Close friends;
It came with me everywhere I went.
It stopped sleeping on the jumper
And slept at the bottom of my bed,
Near my toes,
Instead.

But it dreamed strange dreams,
The Thinginthecorner,
And it kicked me in its sleep.
And its claws,
However well hidden,
Left deep scratches in my skin.

So it sleeps on the floor again,
The Thinginthecorner.
It’s been asleep for a long time.
Maybe it died,
I’m not sure.
But I’ll just leave it near the door,
In case it wants to go
And is too polite to say so.
©2005-2009 ~BunnyHeadWounds
:iconbunnyheadwounds:

Author's Comments

This was written a while ago... I'm going to let you make up your own mind as to what it's about.

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:iconspoonfork:
This would probably work better as prose. I'll hesitate a guess at 'LOVE'
:iconbunnyheadwounds:
Thanks for taking the time to read this...
Love wasn't the idea, but hey, then again, I never thought of it like that.
:)
Have a gummy for your efforts. :gummybear:

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We didn't give it a mouth so it cannot complain.
:iconlorenzlacar:
Nice, I could see this making its way into a twisted kids book.
I have to disagree with spoonfork, I feel it's quite good as a poem, prose would be to restricting and would call for a rewrite to fit conventions better.

I kinda wants me a Thinginthecorner, if only I could get them outta my head and into my room.

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You learn quite quickly as a postie, just how few people care for their fellows.
:iconi-nsomniac:
Wow .... I am in love with this. And I definitely think it works best as poetry, as LorenzLacar says, it would be too restricted as prose. As far as ideas go it reminded me of the whole "elephant in the living room" concept of a problem (addicition in particular) in a family that just goes unadressed but is still detrimental. I don't know, that's what I thought of. Anyway. This is awesome and I shall :+fav: .... Yay.

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With pulleys and wieghts
Creating a radio play just for two:

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:iconstrangebutok:
OH WOW. Making The Thing In The Corner all one word is fantastic. Adds so much more mystery to what the thing actually is... the disjointed rhyming I love so much, really emphasises your somewhat intitial discomfort of the thing, then you still not being able to understand its presence.

Amazing ending. Brilliant. :clap:

Such great work. Can see kids in school assembly chanting this with masks on!!!! It's one of those freaky imaginative story...do you remember "Where The Wilds Things Are"? Or a book like that? That little boy dreams of that island with all the monsters??.....anyway, now I'm rambling...:+fav: all the way.

What is it about? Stray pet? Long lost family member? A ghost of a friend? Monster under the bed? "Drop Dead Fred" kind of imaginery friend??? I'm intrigued.

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I don't do pretty...

:evillaugh:

This culture demeans us all...
:iconbunnyheadwounds:
Thank you so much! :hug:
Wow... To have small children in masks chanting my poem... That's the best one can hope for! And I loved Where the Wild Things Are.

I intended it to be about my depression, in a way. I used to cut myself, and felt like the compulsion to do that followed me wherever I went. But it gave me a sense of... I don't know, control, and there was security in that. I guess that's a pretty messed-up way to go about describing it, but it's the best I can do.

Thank you so much for the fave, and your kind words. :)

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We didn't give it a mouth so it cannot complain.
:iconbunnyheadwounds:
Thanks for the fave! :hug:
You're right, it is about addiction.
:)

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We didn't give it a mouth so it cannot complain.
:iconstrangebutok:
Yeah, that was a pretty great fucking book. I nearly bought it last week, but had to withhold because my car needed petrol instead...with your talent, you could write some amazing kids books!!!

I see what you mean now. What a way to describe depression. That's phenomenal. I used to cut too. Until someone told me it was childish, I have learnt to go wasy on myself. Like, I used to run my wrists up and down our wire fencing about once a week, or just get knives and hack into old scars. I makes you feel better. The pain makes you forget what else you were worrying about. I suppose that's why I loved getting my tattoo so much.

:hug: You're welcome. I hope the thinginthecorner stays dead...

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I don't do pretty...

:evillaugh:

This culture demeans us all...
:iconbunnyheadwounds:
Heh... I wanna write kid's books... If they let Neil Gaiman do it, then they'll let me. Kids books should be creepier, give them a sense that the world's not all happy kiddies and talking dogs.
Spatulas are good for getting stuff out of your head, just so you know. :)

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We didn't give it a mouth so it cannot complain.

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